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騙老師說我寫了但其實壓根沒動筆，後來還有這種成績我都感到內疚了...

作業主旨似乎是要提出自己對於不實廣告的一些觀點，但是不管怎樣他被我寫成抱怨文了

(老師似乎並不介意，或者這真的是老師要的? 這是個謎；我不敢問。)

HTC Desire HD
The HTC Desire HD is a smartphone released on January 2011 and became one of the most recommended models at the time. It claims that its excellent hardware has higher probability to upgrade the core system and the opportunity is much higher than any other models with (at) the price. A year later on May 2012 HTC released an excit(ing)ed list of models that they promise will be able to upgrade to the latest system version, which is the Android 4.0. HTC however broke their promise two months later. They released a new list of models that will be upgraded and the model Desire HD has been simply crossed out. The volatile attitude of HTC not only affects the interests of the buyers but also greatly damage(s) the company's credibility. I believe that I will not buy any other HTC products any more.
(主要只是在說HTㄈ出爾反爾生的孩子沒屁眼兒! 總結文法錯誤x2)


Maybelline Great Lash Lots of Lashes (Mascara)
Nowadays more and more makeup products are looking for easier and quicker makeup. For example the Maybelline Falsies Flared Mascara, it claims that “no false eyelashes needed” in the commercial; it however never works that well on me. On the internet, there are lots of people are doing the review of the mascara but none of them works as well as it shows in the commercial. Not just for this particular brand and product but most of the makeup products in the market are overstate(d). I know that and I (am) however still buying their new items since makeup has socially constructed to be something that is a requirement of a woman. Makeup changes woman's outward (appearance) and also becomes an important part of natural selection. (HOW???)
(純粹抱怨我的睫毛ㄊㄇㄉ無法刷的像廣告那樣。總結文法錯誤x3)


Movie trailers (In time)
Movie(s) ha(ve)s been one of my favorite entertainments ever since I was a kid. And one thing that bothers me a lot is that some movie trailers are advertising everywhere. Although the trailer looks extremely exciting the movie is not always as well (good) as you expected since all the fun parts were shown in the trailer. For example the movie, In Time (2011), the whole story has basically been told by the trailer and (there is) no fun left in the movie. There is no reason for me to spend twenty dollars to watch a movie that I can tell everything by watching the trailer.
(抱怨鐘點戰是大爛片。總結文法錯誤x4)


老師評分：7.5/10 Good



快400字的三段文以我的能力居然不到10個錯誤啊!!!!

雖然錯的都還是很低級的錯誤，但是整體來說我的文法錯誤比以前少太多了吧!!!

我自己都大大的吃了兩津!!

到底是我被以前的老師討厭還是我的英文真的有進步啊??!! ლ(́◕◞౪◟◕ლ)

我的寫作方式沒有變過啊!!!